Lets Talk About skin Care, Beauty And Health Tips

Iâve just spent a small fortune buying my 16 year old daughter skincare but she now tells me that see needs something for her âdryâ arms and legs. A friend recommended getting some Nivea Body for dry skin, does anyone know if Nivea is any good or can suggest a âcheapâ alternative

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"Cheap" shouldn't be part of the vocabulary with skin care - 87% of all products contain mineral oil and this is very cheap and actually makes your skin more dry - so go for something with a shea or cocoa butter or vitamin e or natural oils.
It may cost a little extra but you don't want any skin to absorb mineral oil - so read labels -
(Arbonne, Aveeno, Berts Bee or Booths products)

I have an uber rough draft of a poem. Care to help revise?

'ight guys. Tear it to shreds. :)



Grasping the glacial hand,
Papery-thin skinned corpse,
I stare into crimson eyes-
The steps begin.

I dance with darkness
Cruel but enticing.
Itâs just harmless play.
These steps canât change me.

Flawlessly our feet glide,
Animalistic excitement builds,
Sinewy arms pull me close-
The steps quicken.

I dance with darkness
Cruel but enticing.
Itâs just harmless play.
These steps canât change me.

Bodies bowed against each other,
Flesh upon flesh,
Ice slithers into my soul-
The steps persist.

I dance with darkness
Cruel but enticing.
Itâs just harmless play.
These steps canât change me, can they?

Silence follows fading notes,
Our pretzeled limbs try untangling,
Only to be discovered fused-
The steps bind.

I danced with darkness
Alluring at first.
I thought itâd be okay.
Those steps distorted my soul.

Bloodlust eyes, frosty skin,
Reptilian cunning,
I am darkness.
Care to dance?
Thanks. The line "I am darkness" is supposed to show the complete takeover of soul. If that is unclear to others please say.
Thank you so much for your kindness. It is extremely encouraging.

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First, I want to say that I am a poet, too. And I pride myself on my vocabulary. But you have a great vocabulary, much better than mine. But why would you say in the fourth stanza that you are dancing with darkness ( a good line), but contradict it in the last stanze with "I am darkness." You need to read your poem aloud to a few people or have them read it to you so you can see what might be confusing to others.
Your repetition was great, repeating how as you got further into the dance, you were more drawn and changed. That shows a big thing about your character and your attitude.
I know that when we post poems on Answers, we expect to be ripped apart, but I can't think of many things to say about your poem except for the fact that it is really great. I don't have much criticism.